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I don’t need them to believe in me,
I know I might seem weak but look can deceive.
I guess their rather let me think I am down,
Make me imagine that what I see isn’t real.
And there is nothing in the world I can do or say,
To be the way I am.

Although sometimes their poison bites,
I know that analyzing souls are not their job,
Like they could ever understand more than their ego needs,
They rather lock us all in where we can never see,
Changes that we could make, rules that need to break.
If you will try strong enough, just believe in you and all will work out. never let anyone tell you that you can't do or chang something!
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brass-bird Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2010
Ooooh, I love that last stanza. Especially the first line. Biting poison- very nice.
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MyArtself Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2010  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thanks a lot! :aww:
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WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010   General Artist
I agree with ~mindlessmaze, but I like the message you've written, it's quite interesting the way you wrote it. Nice job.
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MyArtself Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thank you! :D
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WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010   General Artist
my pleasure :heart:
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mindlessmaze Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009
This has a good point/message. :)

also I've few grammar remarks/questions -
Is it maybe:
"I guess they'd rather let me think I am down"
and

"I know that analyzing souls is not their job"
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MyArtself Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009  Professional Artisan Crafter
Ah well, english is not my main language but I try ;)
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mindlessmaze Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009
You're doing fine, just keep it up :)
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MyArtself Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thanks! :hug:
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A-Thrash-In-The-Pan Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
deep dude
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